Silas Thorne's Journal

driven wild when you're fed writhing dreams through the bars
at the feeding time.

Love that image! Is this one you're going to do at the next poetry reading?

I'm not sure, it is a more conservative crowd- but I'd love to!

I don't think there is anything in this poem that would offend adults even if they are conservative. I think you should.

Rather intersting imagery there is something a touch disturbing about it, which is usually a good thing. I do so like to be distrubed.

This poem is neat , for many reasons -
For one, the build up, the steady rhythm that feeds the reader, makes them want more -

Before the cut off. Is the beast being tamed?

Bah, we're robbed! But brilliantly robbed! This is veeery sensual, and somewhat sad! The man here, being compared to beast, seems to be being lured into a cage by desire- the beast is still wild but gets what it craves. OoOOo. ... But again, it's still wild- for the moment. "Feeding time" - loaded words. And the words "writhing dreams" together is a story within itself. Hehe.

Erm, I'm about to go to bed, so that might seem like a half-*ssed response, but ... this is a really well-worked poem, and fun to read aloud!! You should really do it at a reading!

(note from Silas- Yes, I get it )

ahhhhhh

passionate.

that's all I can say for now. This might just be my favorite one thus far.