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Waiting.

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ChinaRose
, 03-02-2009 at 07:50 AM (1957 Views)
Sky,
blue as always,
dizzy, and florid.

Sun,
dazzling as always,
dry, and bored.


North Africa,
As it used to be,
In my dream.
and there,

I am waiting as usual,
waiting for something,
waiting for the future,
cold,serene,and far.

ChinaRose.

Updated 03-02-2009 at 09:44 PM by ChinaRose

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  1. Dark Muse's Avatar
    Wonderful, this was quite stunning
  2. Silas Thorne's Avatar
    Great work!

    Just one small suggestion:
    Change North africa to North Africa, as Africa is a place.

    Keep on with the writing. Since English is your second language you can do things with it in writing poetry many other people cannot. I mean this in a good way.
  3. Virgil's Avatar
    Yes, that pivot to North Africa openned the entire piece up. Nice work China.