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Mercury Rain

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Dark Muse
, 01-09-2009 at 02:32 AM (1093 Views)
This is one of my more experimental works.

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Mercury Rain

Silver--mercury drops 
F A L L I N G- 
                     softly 
                     softly 

A whisper upon the wind 
C A L L I N G-
                     softly
                     softly 

A leaf blowing 
W R O N G F U L L Y 
the other way: 
                     turn back
                     too late 

Eyes crying 
S C A R I N G
                     ( too late), (too late)

Red--mercury 
B L E E D I N G
                        always 
                        always 

Taste the end is near 
crashing, colliding
    subsiding 

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  1. Virgil's Avatar
    I like the experiment Muse. I like this especially:
    Taste the end is near
    crashing, colliding
    subsiding

    not sure what that or the entire poem as a whole is say, but I like texture and what the different line breaks do.
  2. maraki16's Avatar
    i like it though i cannot really tell why i like it; why is the format like that and you say that it is an experimental work?
    the way it is written is totally new to me. could you please give me some feedback on that? a short explanation maybe? this work is really interesting i must say. i don't know really what was your aim, and what you wanted to achieve by this experiment, but i like it.
  3. Dark Muse's Avatar
    I call it experimental becasue I am just playing with something new that I have never done before and not completely sure where I am going with it, but just playing around with structre and format.

    In the world of contemparory poetry, there is a lot being done to change the conventional way in which a poem is written. I think it is called Picture Poetry, or Visual Poetry, becasue you try and convel an emotion not just with the words you use, but how those words are acutally put on the page.