Night Thoughts As night falls I must be honest with myself In the darkness the soul is in the most turmoil Every star another lost thought eternally trying to reach out But always held within the same place unable to connect
Ooh, I really liked the first two stanzas and perhaps the third was good too. "I must be honest/with myself" That sounds so sincere. I was completely drawn in. I didn't care for the ending though I must admit. The poem was striving for something profound, and the ending just seemed to state the obvious. Just my opinion D-M.
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the first three stanzas are really great! i like them, especially the 'setting' of the poem....night, stars, thoughts...i really like it. the last stanza was not as good as the others, but the poem as a whole is reeeally nice