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The Unforgivable

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Dark Muse
, 09-22-2008 at 01:23 AM (1490 Views)
This is something I wrote up for fun. In lieu of my last post about my humur that others do not get. Well this is an example of that. I wrote this poem intended it to be a bit of dark humur

The Unforgivable

You know that it is true
anything I would do for you
my loyalty is without bounds

Blood upon your hands
not a question I ask
while I throw away the gun
and dispose of the body

Upon the stands the oath I take
is a false one compared to the oath
I have given you

If ever you need an alibi
you know I am here for you
confess all your sins into my ear
and let us share in them together

Forever my lips remain sealed
if ever one would try to harm you
I will be the one to put them to rest

But there is one thing
you should never ever do
one path should not be crossed

Know I will forgive anything
but the one unforgivable sin
many may think to take the life of another
is the most vile, but that I can understand

As compassionate as I am to you
you must never (no reason will justify)
ever (no excuse will I stand by)
betray me, cheat, and lie.

For that I will surely destroy you
with my own bare hands, see it through
I promise you, it will hurt me more than you
but disloyalty is the one thing
I will never abide by from you
my one true love.

Updated 09-22-2008 at 05:05 PM by Dark Muse

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  1. PabloQ's Avatar
    Yikes, I see why some folks might not get it. It's both twisted and kind of comic...Poe-esque. Scary and quirky.

    It may just be me, but I find typos a distraction in poetry. I can't tell if it's a mispelled word or a play on words.
    3rd verse - stands or stand, works either way but anticipated the singular, but there could have been multiple trials, which would make the narrator's loyalty even stronger.
    Last line of 4th verse - I'm sure you mean us v. use.
    I'm not being critical, but I enjoy reading poetry slowly word for word, so I usually catch this type of thing. In the rhythm of the poem, it goes clunk in my head and I have to stop and see what made the noise. Was it intentional or not. Sometimes it's just hard to tell. Good poem though.
  2. Dark Muse's Avatar
    Hehe yes it is dark and twisted. I did you stands on purpose, but the other I will go and fix, thank you for catching it.
  3. mtpspur's Avatar
    Forewarned, forearmed. With that in mind I still name you my favorite poet though pendragon is probably jealous of the honor. Yes I thought this was witty and cute if I may use such a word in the precious of the s-e-r-i-o-u-s writer of mood and whimsy.
  4. Dark Muse's Avatar
    Thank you, yes, you may use such a word. Part of this poem was inspired by another poem I read of which I cannot recall the name of off the top of my head, that has something of a smilliar nature, and I always thought that poem was cute, while others found it distrubing.