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Journey to the Beartooth Plateau (edit12/16)

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from last entry...
A few moments later, the bear was ready to travel, and the three headed down along the edge of the river, hopping from stone to stone as the markers that the man would point out to them. they travelled to a point where the river was shallow enough to wade across, and they saw little or nothing along their way except for trees and grasses with the occassional mouse or marmot.
The man and his two companions waded across the river, and then journeyed for 3 days in the same direction over mountain ranges and cold rivers, through dark forests, and across warm sunny fields. Along the way the man explained the legend of the 'Blue Grizzly' to Spur and Urso.

"There was a man that came across a bear many years ago. The bear was looking for something to eat and the man just happened to be in the same valley. This was before the men could communicate with bears. The man turned to get away from the bear, but the bear kept approaching, faster and faster until the man could hear the heavy footsteps rapidly approaching. The man slipped and fell cutting his knee on the rocks. He looked around and found several trees that had piled up into a deadfall. He scrambled as quickly as he could. When the bear came to the spot where the man fell, it licked his blood on the rocks, and roared loudly then sat there. The man cowered deeper under the logs, and stayed quiet, fearful even of breathing. The bear sat, and would not move. It soon began to howl up at the moon as it came out above the mountains and between the tall lodgepole pines as they swayed in the wind.

The man although frightened could see that the bear was troubled, and he decided to try to discover the reason the bear was so sad. The whole night passed with the bear growling and howling at the moon, but somehow the young man managed to fall asleep listening to this. When he awoke, the bear was gone, but footprints were all around the ground just feet away from where the man lay. He hurried off to distance himself from the bear."

more in a little bit, work beckons.
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  1. kiz_paws's Avatar
    Eagerly waiting! Kizzo
  2. mtpspur's Avatar
    I ocnfess I like the bear and would love stories about him.
  3. Captain Pike's Avatar
    I found it easy and enjoyable, reading your apparently science-fiction story. So much of this genre is cluttered up with wordy, faux-computerese, which pigeonhole's the work as ****ty-science-fiction, relegated to geeks alone: all other serious literature readers -- stay away. In the short segments of yours I've read, you combine a kind of nature/spiritual with futuristic, off-planet plausibility in a way that would, I believe, attract a wide spectrum of readers. I came away from your blog smiling and puzzling for a few hours all of a reality in which we, naturally, communicate with other intelligent species without judgment. Will you continue? Will you lead us along further through a way of thinking where curiosity is more central than fear?_P.
  4. B-Mental's Avatar
    Thanks for the comments kiz, mtpspur, and Capt. Pike. I think that the story will slowly unfold quite well. I hope that people can relate to the characters. Their motivations should slowly come together... I'm trying to get the basis for the home planet set up and then the future planet storyline will come into play...their will be some flashbacks, and some back and forth for a couple more entries, but long days of work tend to prevent me from writing it out as long entries...I really need to spend a lot of time when I'm on days off on this.
  5. Lily Adams's Avatar
    I like it so far, B! It's very different and surreal. I'm looking foward to more. It's quite intriguing with the bear.
  6. B-Mental's Avatar
    Thanks Lily, the bear comes in the begining of the story, and then will be back later, almost done with the bear for the time being. Just have to finish the story part I'm on now.