Virgil

Thats pretty awesome Virgil. How long did it take to write that

I like that a ton Virgil. It really painted the picture in my head:)

Thanks. I played around with it off and on for a couple of days. When writing in free verse you just put out your theme and then work the poetic conciets (metaphor, similes, etc). But with a fixed form like this fitting the rhyme scheme and line length and rhythm makes it so much harder. But you know, by fitting to the form it actually forces a creativity that wouldn't normally come out. I'm still not happy with a couple of spots, but I just gave up.

Very well done - reminds me of "Casey at the Bat", though I don't understand jack about the game. (-:

When I think about electricity I think spark and constant motion. I see both of this in your poem. The spark coming from the instant in which bat meets ball, while the motion from pitcher pitching, batter swinging, batter running, ball in flight, etc. I wonder if there is a way to orient the poem to capture this direction of spark then flow. This would be a good way to create that electricity you spoke of in the beginning lines which keeps the ballgame moving “inning to inning.” I’m not sure what the rules are for a Petrarchan sonnet but I looked it up and the ending three lines is supposed to be a “closing” of sorts? What if instead of anything “subsiding,” you leave the ending mysterious, open-ended, in continuous motion? I don’t know, maybe this form doesn’t lend itself to this type of ending.