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instead of crying

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NikolaiI
, 11-04-2007 at 02:28 AM (1093 Views)
The eyes- the window to the soul.
I rest in my eyes,
It's where I feel my being.
I know that it's top-heavy,
But it's the only place I feel a thing.

And so I am,
Aware of my breathing,
Feeling,
Unsure if it's glad or sadness;
Continuing, and not crying,
But it seems now,
My whole being is in my eyes.

[I]Oh, strange. In my dream last night, as well as being banned from Lit-Net, I also remember discussing this poem with someone. But now no one comments! I guess it must be lousy. :bawling: Oh yeah, definitely I was (discussing it) I remember explaining it some. So, does anyone get what I was trying to express in it? [/I]
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  1. crazefest456's Avatar
    ugh, I suck at explaining things; anyway, I'll try my best not to make your nightmare turn for worse (meaning, I hope I interpret this correctly):
    I think you're saying that your Reality, your identity, is determined by your sensory perception (doesn't matter what sort of emotions you inculcate). Your actual 'breath', the existence of such feeling, means that this is enough to identify You.
    I hope I'm close...nice poem!
  2. NikolaiI's Avatar
    Well I was trying to say that the more important sensation the author of the poem is that which is in his eyes. Since I say it's "continuing and not crying," that indicates that it's almost crying. So it's a feeling of sadness; the tears are below the surface and instead of them, the feeling is a bit of unreality; but most simply experiencing things a little differently- resting in the eyes, as if the 'being' of the person could lift from the body and only be felt in one place. So, just a melancholic feeling which isn't expressed by crying; continuity, and this momentary sensation and poem is not the end of existence. The repetitive last two lines also lend weight to this- it's a little more dry, a simple explanation of the feeling. I guess that's what I'd thought about it.