the ocean always dreamed blue dreams

Thank you for sharing these, qimissung. I think I prefer the first one, but I feel that only means I need to spend more time with the second!

Yes, thAt poor second poem: a perfectly good poem in its own right but having to stand in the shadow of the magnificent first one! Beginning with
"I will send you books,
bound like a schoolgirl's hair
with radiant ribbons,"
I knew I was safe in the masterful hands of whoever was making this poem.

And it's wonderful how "the end" can be read in at least two different ways after the beauty of:

"your arms
will wend and wind
and find in me
a home, I know."
"wend and wind and find"! Oh, my!

They are a pair of star crossed lovers. Yin and Yang.

Beautiful.

Thanks for reading, guys. I think the second does pale in comparison to the first. Let me see what I can do; this may take awhile.

OK, so I didn't so much change it as replace it.

Very nice Qimi. Both are outstanding.

Qu'est ce 'Le Commancement'"? I looked it up in my dictionaire francais and could not find it.

Just the same the first piece has
much to admire, esp. the word play,
"wind" and "wend" and the risque connotation of "recto" and "verso." (Not to be risque, but the comic tone reminds me, a little, of Sharon Olds's "Topography."

Oh! I used a translation site on the web, AuntShecky. I typed in "The Beginning" and hit translate, and that's what came up. Well, in English "to commence" means "to begin," so I thought it was probably accurate. Confession: I don't actually know French.

Thanks for stopping by and reading. I still have some reading of my own to do for your magnum opus.

i love both, are great
but of course, the first one really much more outstanding
thank you Qim for sharing so beautiful pieces

Thank you, Yuka, and thanks for reading them.

They are both beautiful poems Qimi. These lines:

I will send you books,
bound like a schoolgirl's hair
with radiant ribbons,

is reminiscent of the 'I'll send you a bouquet of freshly sharpened pencils' from You've Got Mail, that other Valentine's Day favourite.
'Commancement' in your title is spelled incorrectly, which is possibly why Aunt Shecky couldn't find it in her dictionary. It should be Commencement. You could also have used 'Debut' which I believe, but could be wrong, is more commonly used to mean beginning.

I also liked the use of 'verso' and 'recto' with their saucy undertones. Nice poetry as always Qimi. Much better than chocolate.

Thanks for reading and commenting, Fifth. I've corrected the spelling, although the connection between the English and French words seemed pretty clear.

May I say you are an excellent commentator? You always make a person feel special; I especially love the way you connect what we write with that of a recognized poet. And "saucy undertones..." makes me feel like Andrew Marvell or Robert Herrick. Thank You!