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yuka
, 01-17-2011 at 07:14 AM (1179 Views)
Mimes

They call him clown
A person walking a tightrope in the air
Because of lack of experience
He almost falls off to the ground
But soon controls his body and mind
Reenter the play difficult
They are a group of onlookers
Sometimes amazed by
His outstanding performance
But more of a gloating mentality
Waiting for his poor fate
They never realize
When he stands overhead
They become of his mimes

Am I The One?

I take this poem
You wrote for me
No addressing, no hinting
But I still try to find my trace
Applaud secretly
Delight stealthily
Oh! Am I the one
Who you miss very much?

Updated 01-18-2011 at 03:36 AM by yuka

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  1. Virgil's Avatar
    Your "Mimes" poem is very well put together and enjoyable, actually enlightening at the end. In the fifth line, grammatically you must mean "controls" with an "s" at the end.
  2. yuka's Avatar
    Thank you Virgil for your comment and grammar correction. It's always welcome
  3. The Comedian's Avatar
    I really enjoyed these last few lines of your "mimes" poem:

    They never realize
    When he stands overhead
    They become of his mimes

    How it plays on the mime turning the observers unknowingly into his/her act. . .and the reader too, as reading a poem is sort of like following the play-by-play narrative of the mime.