The Voice Of The Loser

[Koa]

Not my best thing but that's what I feel like sharing for now...(even if re-reading it, it does feel clumsy :rolleyes: )
I wrote it all of a sudden one day at school after an argument with a classmate (not my favourite kind of person) about trivial things.


The Voice Of The Loser

I'm the loser
my taste is bitter
and I know you can't understand my reasons
but believe me, I don't understand yours
I'm loveless
you're satisfied
I'm useless
you feel you're always right
I'm a polemist
I can't help complaining
about everything I see
but when I do that
it's not me
it's just the voice of my restless conscience
that comes over me
and wants to overcome you:
it needs affirmation
and it can't get it
cos it belongs to me
and I'm a loser.

23/01/01

[Jay]

I like it. And I can understand those feelings, I have them often.

[b]

Hello, Koa

I think you wrote another nice poem, Koa. I completely understand the feeling that you try to express - in contradiction to what your poem implies. I also have the irritating behaviour of complaining about my environment, usually correcting banal mistakes and bullying people around me with their lack of fantasy.

The self mockery and the complaints about 'yourself' really create a sarcastic, annoying atmosphere which encourages 'the voice of the loser' even more. Nice!

[Koa]

Hey thanks! I thought it really sucked cos i wasnt having feedback ;)

[b]

Hello, Koa

That - indeed - is the problem we are all facing here on this forum, using these limited ways of communication.

The fact that I don't post here as often as I once did, has to do with the amount of time that I spent on other things and hasn't got anything to do with the quality of the poems posted here.

Greetings,

Bart

[Koa]

Yeah i know- and i understand that people might read this and don t find anyhting to say...i don't always comment on all i read, even if i like it.

And i should spend more time in other things (such as studying..ehmmm) and not here ;)

[Phoenix_Tears]

o finally someone wrote a poem i could relate those feelings too. i really like it koa. I tried writing like that but .. i could not find the words for it. thanks!

[Koa]

Thanks a lot Phoenix. That's what poetry is for in mye view, give words to people to related feelings....share feelings. So what you said makes me really happy and proud :) Thanks.

[lallison]

Thanks, I love it. You seriously display poetry as an art. Thank you so much for letting us read your work!

[Delta40]

i liked the opposite poles and the need to overwhelm another and hate yourself too. nice tangle of emotions here.