conception

[cacian]

the immaculate
conception
is riddled with deception
it does not move
or thrust
it just looks up
to see
if someone hard enough
stares long enough
it turns outstanding
at all expense it is
intending.

[Pompey Bum]

Another great one, Cacian.

it does not move
or thrust

Exactly the kind of vivid, image-laden language I suggested you try. And the slant rhyme of thrust with up (in the subsequent line) is brilliant. Nice job!

[cacian]

Pompey so glad you like this one !!:biggrin5: