soundless

[cacian]

the human mind
likes a challenge
it analyses hidden
beyond what is already
a pattern

the obvious always needy
it seems it isn't easy

so life intricates
lays it down greedy

the further down the
cell glides to reach
out for the out
it will erupt about
multiple choices
of doubts

it is not possible
to reach plausible

audible is not allowed
deaf is the acceptable

silence wraps it all
because ignorance is
a roar.

[M Kirkpatrick]

the human mind
likes a challenge
it analyses hidden
beyond what is already
a pattern

the obvious always needy
it seems it isn't easy

so life intricates
lays it down greedy

the further down the
cell glides to reach
out for the out
it will erupt about
multiple choice
of doubt

it is not possible
to reach plausible

audible is not allowed

deaf is the acceptable
silence wrapts it all
because ignorance is
a roar.


Liked your poem cacian, soundless is echoed in mind while meditating.
Regards Michael.

[cacian]

Kirkpatrick for reading and the comment. I did not realise you meditated. :)

[M Kirkpatrick]

Kirkpatrick for reading and the comment. I did not realise you meditated. :)

Indeed I do Meditate cacian, and have done so since 1974 forty-four years so far, have a teaching meditation thread here on this forum, look it up in you are interested cacian, it is for beginners, and its very eay to follow.

Warmest regards Michael.

[Mohammad Ahmad]

silence wraps it all
because ignorance is
a roar.
last stanza or indeed line not a full stanza as mentioned above; here silence wraps it all is good metaphor but to say because ignorance is a roar it seems to me not a suitable description ... I think because ignorance is its roof \ its all roof, thus the silence wraps it all because the ignorance is the head and the head of failure indeed.
Dear Cacion it is just a quick reading on your poem
best wishes

[kiz_paws]

I enjoyed your poem, cacian.

[cacian]

silence wraps it all
because ignorance is
a roar.
last stanza or indeed line not a full stanza as mentioned above; here silence wraps it all is good metaphor but to say because ignorance is a roar it seems to me not a suitable description ... I think because ignorance is its roof \ its all roof, thus the silence wraps it all because the ignorance is the head and the head of failure indeed.
Dear Cacion it is just a quick reading on your poem
best wishes

hello there Mohammad and thank you for reading.
I am sorry if you do not agree but in this case sometimes loud makes too much noise it comes across as ignorance.
It is just another way of looking at it.

[cacian]

I enjoyed your poem, cacian.

thank pou kiz_paws :)