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Jerrybaldy
03-26-2018, 05:51 PM
The wind whipped her hair
A cat of nine tails as she ate chocolate cake
Brown crumbs resting
On her black pencil skirt.
‘It’s not you’
She began
I looked up at the fan
Beneath the lamp
Bourgeoise helicopter
Her lipstick was on the black side
Of red
A fly landed upon a white linen napkin
Juxtaposing
‘It’s not you’
She began
The fan was off kilter
The waitress was walking this way
She was going to ask if everything was ok
I hate when people ask
If everything’s ok
A baby began to scream
Needing comfort or a nipple
It knew just what was coming
A seagull outside the window
Cocked it’s head
Like it knew more than a seagull
Could possibly know
I played with the ketchup sachet
Squeezing it
Daring it to explode
‘It’s not you’
She began,
No longer looking like she was mine,

I stood and walked out the door
Swapping hot fish air
For a frigid wind from the sea
Hands in pockets
With wrigleys, coins and receipts
Muttering
Through salt and vinegar lips
‘ this post will have no end’

kiz_paws
03-27-2018, 09:43 AM
The wind whipped her hair
A cat of nine tails as she ate chocolate cake
Brown crumbs resting
On her black pencil skirt.
‘It’s not you’
She began
I looked up at the fan
Beneath the lamp
Bourgeoise helicopter
Her lipstick was on the black side
Of red
A fly landed upon a white linen napkin
Juxtaposing
‘It’s not you’
She began
The fan was off kilter
The waitress was walking this way
She was going to ask if everything was ok
I hate when people ask
If everything’s ok
A baby began to scream
Needing comfort or a nipple
It knew just what was coming
A seagull outside the window
Cocked it’s head
Like it knew more than a seagull
Could possibly know
I played with the ketchup sachet
Squeezing it
Daring it to explode
‘It’s not you’
She began,
No longer looking like she was mine,

I stood and walked out the door
Swapping hot fish air
For a frigid wind from the sea
Hands in pockets
With wrigleys, coins and receipts
Muttering
Through salt and vinegar lips
‘ this post will have no end’Jerry, what a wonderful poem. I loved it!

tailor STATELY
03-27-2018, 01:30 PM
Poignant and well detailed... enjoyed.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

tonywalt
03-31-2018, 06:59 PM
Brilliant, a tour of force

AuntShecky
04-05-2018, 03:43 PM
Got the imagery; "bourgeois helicoper" for the ceiling fan is a pretty good one. Satiric, in an age when we're starved for it. Capitalize "Wrigley's" if you mean chewing gum in yr pocket; otherwise there's a mental image of fishing worms!