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Devoly
02-08-2018, 07:16 PM
I am only 11 and this isn't my best work. Sweet Dreams

Do you know the dreams where you don’t want to wake up from? The dreams where you dive and dive in candy, the dreams when you are gliding in the air, having an amazing time? You’re in that dream, you’re having an extraordinary time but all of a sudden you stop. You try to fly again but when you open your arms in a hug like way, you’re struck with a pain, an agonizing, gruesome pain. You start having a panic attack,
but before you knew it, you hit the ground. Your ribs seem to have collapsed on impact. You realize what happened and you seem to be confused on how you’re still alive. You got up, miracuously. You see a wooden cabin and run there for safety, but what you don’t know is that something is lurking inside the very house. When you get in it you see a shadowy figure, walking, he sees you and immediately pins you to the ground. Every time you make a subtle movement, the shadow like figure strikes you with a long, stinging, pain. You are forced to stay there until he’s done with what he’s doing. The shadow took off your leg so even if you got out of the trap, you couldn’t run. You stare at your leg and all the blood gushing out. You start hallucinating at that moment and you know what you see? You see your mother, laughing, singing, everything. You’re gonna bleed out soon and you know you have to get out of this, but your mind is to scared to do anything.

You want to die, but can’t. You attempt fighting off the shadowy figure, but the pain striked you again and you remember. The figure unwrapped you and you’re left dead. You bled out during the striking pain and your body is left there, rotting. Your blood is still gushing out of your leg and you have lifeless eyes. You wake up, or so you thought. When you wake up, you’re in your house, and it’s a regular morning. You leave for school and kiss your mother goodbye, but when you leave the house you’re met with the same shadowy figure that left you to die. You panic, running back in your house, panting. You call for your mother, thinking this isn’t a dream; fool move. She came to you, weeping, and crying about your death. She kept saying “Why does he have to go so soon?” You keep telling her “Mom, I’m right here, can’t you see?”. She continues, and continues, and continues, until.. Her face disintegrates and her puddle of tears turn into blazing fire. You run. You attempt going to your neighbors house but everything is disappearing in front of your eyes. You turn around, nothing. You feel like the walls are closing in. You start having another panic attack, and before you know it, you wake up. You think to yourself “Is this real?” Of course not, someone stated in a very creepy voice. You look at your surroundings, you’re in a hospital. You wander around briefly, and you find your mother and father, looking at you, in the womb. Your mom starts crying, then your dad, then you start weeping for no apparent reason. Your mother says “I can’t do it..” your dad then says “I know a way..”. You are teleported to an abortion hospital, your mother, still weeping, your dad says, we can’t go through with this, knowing killed an innocent baby.” You then realize, you were going to be aborted, but the your parents loved you to long. You think to yourself “Are these dreams all about my past?”. You then close your eyes to meet another location. You see the beach, people having fun, enjoying life. You then look over to see a lifeless soul, floating around, and of course, the black figure. The 2 came over to you and spoke, in a very deep, creepy voice “We know everything about you. You’re in a dream you can’t escape, a coma.”. You see your family playing, and you see you. You run to them, thinking they could help. When you tried to hug your mother, she turned into dust. The figure took your hand and he starts flying, along with you. You turn to him and ask “Why?” he says “I know everything about you, I am you. I’m those voices in your head you hear every day, every second of the day.” You move to him and is struck with a stinging pain, just like before. You wake up, for real this time. In a hospital, with your family right there with you. You turn to them and ask “Why?” they say, stunned “Why what?” You tell them “Am I a failed abortion?” They say “Well..”