About life

[Nour]

I wish that you could feel
What I feel
I thought that time could heal
And make things clear
but it's not real
There is no deal
Life is a challenge
so don't be Savage
And try to manage
All the damage
You really need a lot of courage
But don't be afraid
Hope will never fade
( I wanted to say that time won't heal things , sometimes you should stand and do it yourself )
Please your opinion matters !!!! Write me something !! Anything ☺

[tailor STATELY]

About life
I wish that you could feel
What I feel
I thought that time could heal
And make things clear
but it's not real
There is no deal
Life is a challenge
so don't be Savage
And try to manage
All the damage
You really need a lot of courage
But don't be afraid
Hope will never fade

In the spirit of anything I would recommend you dispense with the forced rhymes, they detract from the sensibilities you are trying to convey.

A quick example:

I wish that you could feel
What I feel

I thought time would heal our old wounds
And bring clarity back into our lives
but that's illusory for now

Life is enough of a challenge
without you being unkind
even abusive, sometimes

You really need a lot of courage
to change
from my point of view
But don't be afraid to try...
My hope will never fade

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[LukeHel64]

Good statement above about removing some of the rhymes that feel jammed in and dont flow off the tongue.