Vanilla Ice Cream

[Maana]

Whispering wind on the sunny beach in the drowsiness of the afternoon,
voices from a far-away boat,
melting sweetness, giggling eyes in my arms.

[kiz_paws]

Lovely!
Welcome to LitNet, Maana. :)

[Bowler]

Nice write it has the ring of some good phrasing. I think it could be extended to maybe five stanzas. To write a poem in only three lines it has to have an immediate impact on the reader, that’s the whole point in compressing the content.
To explain, two poems of mine which I hope will illustrate the point.

What a Pity.

In my youth I had all the answers
Wielding the sword of simplicity
To the vagaries of life
With absolute conviction
Then I grew up.

Birthday Presents.

“That’s really boring” said the boy
“I can’t wear that” said the girl
“What’s a birthday?” asked little Malika.

Not great poetry by any means but the meaning is very evident.

Welcome, hope you enjoy your stay.
John.

[Maana]

Thank you for reading and the feedback!

[tonywalt]

loved, LOVED this. powerful. imagery so strong.