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spally
10-29-2017, 08:55 PM
Well, this is probably the first thing I've written in about ten years. I know its not there, but its how it came out.

There is a sadness deep in me
I tried so long to stay unseen
Here is festers, seething on the inside
All around me smiling
Laughing, living
But deep inside me hiding
Is this sadness I can't conquer
Every day spent living, smiling
Like this sadness is not real
Its eating away at who I am
At least the me I thought I was
Was I ever truly happy
Did I ever truly matter
This sadness deep in me
Is slowly crushing me
The air to breath
The will to move
There is no movement here
There is no rhythm
There is no ryime
Just the sadness and the void

tonywalt
10-30-2017, 12:11 AM
Well, this is probably the first thing I've written in about ten years. I know its not there, but its how it came out.

There is a sadness deep in me
I tried so long to stay unseen
Here is festers, seething on the inside
All around me smiling
Laughing, living
But deep inside me hiding
Is this sadness I can't conquer
Every day spent living, smiling
Like this sadness is not real
Its eating away at who I am
At least the me I thought I was
Was I ever truly happy
Did I ever truly matter
This sadness deep in me
Is slowly crushing me
The air to breath
The will to move
There is no movement here
There is no rhythm
There is no ryime
Just the sadness and the void

It's a striking, lean poem and certainly captures a feeling that we all have at some point. Love it. Plath-like

spally
10-31-2017, 06:13 AM
Thank you. Its been a long time since anything has come out. I'm pretty happy with it. I'm hoping more will come

kiz_paws
10-31-2017, 09:13 AM
Hi, Spally!
I am in agreement with Tony. We all have felt like this at some time, so your words hit home with me. :)

spally
11-08-2017, 09:50 PM
Thank you guys so much.