Pete

[tonywalt]

My friend Pete is a good man,
been with the Company for 9 years,
married to his wife for 7 years.

He quit drinking 2 years ago and is quitting
caffeine this year.
He wants to eliminate
gluten from his diet next year.

Never had an accident (caused a few, though),
cuts his grass every Saturday at 9 a.m. sharp.

He's always on time,
and his shirts are neatly pressed

At conferences, I see him grinning over the
top of a cup of white chocolate mocha with soy,
and I always wave my vodka in his direction.

He is what women call "solid," and then
they say, "well, it was time to settle down, and
he was there"

and I can understand that.

He will likely pass quietly in the night,
with that "peaceful look" spread across his face.

I often hear his loud clean laugh at parties,
happy and content,

as I fuc k his wife in the pool room.

[Melanie]

I'm cruising along through your poem
like a sunday afternoon drive
thinking how sweet this poem is
until the end...and fell off my chair!

tee hee, thanks for waking me up on this lazy afternoon.
A little shock therapy.

[tonywalt]

I'm cruising along through your poem
like a sunday afternoon drive
thinking how sweet this poem is
until the end...and fell off my chair!

tee hee, thanks for waking me up on this lazy afternoon.
A little shock therapy.


poetry should have more punch, me thinks, sometimes. no lots of times.

[YesNo]

I think you need to give Pete more punch. Perhaps replace the "." in the last line with " since he's done mine."

[tonywalt]

I think you need to give Pete more punch. Perhaps replace the "." in the last line with " since he's done mine."

Pete has no punch, hence he is cuckolded

[kiz_paws]

Woah!
Ya laid it bare, Tony! :)
Well done.