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tonywalt
10-07-2017, 03:14 PM
As I turn left off Oxford Street
cloaked in a low sky and shuffling
along with the other furrowed brows

I search for the accent of my youth
"Tomato" or "Tomahto" or "Tomata"
"Aunt" or "Ant" or "Auntie"

Punching my cold fists into a
Harrods jacket I enter the tube,
shortly reaching another
grey gray station and soon see
a pub with an old fashioned
clock against the liquored mirror,

damn, it's way past our meeting time
and am I at the right place?

I really could go for
comfort food now, we need this

connection

"Buffalo Wings?" Or is it "Fish and Chips?"
Maybe "Saltfish?"

Which of these do I want?
Eh, it's too late for such a
search.

A sudden hiss of wind
angrily flaps my jacket, and
a raindrop

taps my shoulder-
as a stranger does when they have
wandered and need
direction.

The rain falls.
The sun falls.
The fog falls.
The days fall from the harboring arms of mothers.

I walk alongside the parcelled flats,
pausing at a low bridge and look out at
the bruised dusk of the Old World
as the wind swings my bag like a beacon
against the cold.
Oh, come now – and dance with me
Caribbean.

Melanie
10-08-2017, 04:58 AM
Clever opening...

"As I turn left off Oxford Street
cloaked in a low sky and shuffling
along with the other furrowed brows"

and this...

"A sudden hiss of wind
angrily flaps my jacket, and
a raindrop

taps my shoulder-
as a stranger does when they have
wandered and need
direction."

kiz_paws
10-08-2017, 03:40 PM
Your opening drew me right in.
Descriptions beyond imagination, you got it, Tony!
My favorite verse would be
The rain falls.
The sun falls.
The fog falls.
The days fall from the harboring arms of mothers.Absolutely wonderful. :)

tonywalt
10-09-2017, 10:25 AM
Clever opening...

"As I turn left off Oxford Street
cloaked in a low sky and shuffling
along with the other furrowed brows"

and this...

"A sudden hiss of wind
angrily flaps my jacket, and
a raindrop

taps my shoulder-
as a stranger does when they have
wandered and need
direction."

Thanks Melanie. Homesickness. I can be the worst!

tonywalt
10-09-2017, 10:28 AM
Your opening drew me right in.
Descriptions beyond imagination, you got it, Tony!
My favorite verse would be Absolutely wonderful. :)


Thanks. I think I was so homesick when I wrote this that I literally missed my mum, even as an adult But I love ya London.

Also, I am don't closely identify as british, American or Caribbean, hence the lostness - and different pronounciation of words