civilized-junk
09-28-2017, 03:34 AM
HI everyone
first i want you to pardon me if you see some mistakes and weak linguistic construction , English is not my mother tongue. but i really appreciate your criticism and corrections and I'm sincerely open to all comments and ideas
and this is my humble first try here
Lying on his back, staring at the sky
"Will it remain blue?"
His head tilted to his friend sitting next to him, the smell of wet dirt filling their noses after a light rain
"I think so," his friend replied
Biting on his lips after a wave of pain swept through his whole body
"Do you know?, I do not want to be another idiot dies here"
The sound of a nearby explosion prompted his friend to lower his head and put his hand on his helmet
He laughed hard until he began to cough
"If I were your place a quarter of an hour ago I would do the same thing"
"What is this delirium?" his friend replied.
He looked at his friend at a glance and then stared back into the sky. "What I dread most is that this war will end quickly"
"What?" His friend replied with a great surprise
"Believe me, I may be very selfish, but that's what I feel now. It would be a silly joke if the war ends shortly after my death"
"Stop chattering and relax a little, soon the medics will arrive."
His friend spoke with these words as he patted his shoulder
"Medics ?, huh"
"The strange thing about death is that we do not know what it is until it hits us"
"Something strange, to know exactly what death means, from a single experience that can not be repeated again"
His chest began to rise and fall down hard, trying to pull the last breath he could get into his lungs. He extended his grip in the air
" damn it " his arm fall down
He closed his eyes and rested his head tilted to the side
killed in Action
click L to restart from last checkpoint
the boy turn off his video game saying
" damn it, each time my player dies here, boring silly game"
first i want you to pardon me if you see some mistakes and weak linguistic construction , English is not my mother tongue. but i really appreciate your criticism and corrections and I'm sincerely open to all comments and ideas
and this is my humble first try here
Lying on his back, staring at the sky
"Will it remain blue?"
His head tilted to his friend sitting next to him, the smell of wet dirt filling their noses after a light rain
"I think so," his friend replied
Biting on his lips after a wave of pain swept through his whole body
"Do you know?, I do not want to be another idiot dies here"
The sound of a nearby explosion prompted his friend to lower his head and put his hand on his helmet
He laughed hard until he began to cough
"If I were your place a quarter of an hour ago I would do the same thing"
"What is this delirium?" his friend replied.
He looked at his friend at a glance and then stared back into the sky. "What I dread most is that this war will end quickly"
"What?" His friend replied with a great surprise
"Believe me, I may be very selfish, but that's what I feel now. It would be a silly joke if the war ends shortly after my death"
"Stop chattering and relax a little, soon the medics will arrive."
His friend spoke with these words as he patted his shoulder
"Medics ?, huh"
"The strange thing about death is that we do not know what it is until it hits us"
"Something strange, to know exactly what death means, from a single experience that can not be repeated again"
His chest began to rise and fall down hard, trying to pull the last breath he could get into his lungs. He extended his grip in the air
" damn it " his arm fall down
He closed his eyes and rested his head tilted to the side
killed in Action
click L to restart from last checkpoint
the boy turn off his video game saying
" damn it, each time my player dies here, boring silly game"