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Jerrybaldy
08-14-2017, 05:34 PM
I'd like jam on it and cream.
More cream than you can jam
Into a Jam filled dream.
Love. More love than anybody loved
Anybody any time more love than anybody
Ever felt ever. Thrills. Thrills more thrilling than anybody
Was ever thrilled.
Fulfilment, Fill me fuller. Fill the whole hole.
Fill this dying star, Supernova me
Further
Further than far.

Calidore
08-14-2017, 09:58 PM
Wasn't Jam and Cream a '60s surf band?

Silas Thorne
08-16-2017, 06:51 AM
I love this, particularly the first half. Terrific line breaks. Anybody loves a body, but jam and cream fit well into a jam-filled dream.

YesNo
08-16-2017, 09:23 AM
No one needs a tomb for oneself, but we have needed tombs (or containers for ashes) for parents, a brother, a brother-in-law, aunts and uncles. There will likely be more before someone needs a tomb for me, but who knows? None of them had cancer, but love is the only worthwhile cure even if one doesn't have cancer and even if it is terminal, love as you describe it:

"More love than anybody loved
Anybody any time more love than anybody
Ever felt ever."

Nice description.

kiz_paws
08-16-2017, 09:28 AM
Captivating imagery.
Enjoyed this very much.

Jerrybaldy
09-04-2017, 05:33 AM
Thanks all. Silas you are right I have scrapped the second half and added to the first

cacian
09-04-2017, 06:51 AM
loving the title
and the play on words.
love is certainly in the air :)