Hitching pitching

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Hitching pitching
Never to say in mind
Something is emitting
Though to console a servant
Though to consult any in earth
Souls and bodies were busily anchored
What could it record?
Once harshly violated our lovely stream
Whether at noon or after
Desert needs water
To flow the valleys
And irrigates flowers
None will be soothed
At days or nights
Hinging parts of sunshine
To be a roof for a future
In that giddily mouths of months
To wear a black coat of time
All greedily watchful men should look after
Typically, it will swarm happily last time
A moment when its herder comes after
Sheep, cows, turn milked together
So well perhaps a happy day
Our nestlings will hatch up a freedom.

[YesNo]

The line "Desert needs water" reminded me that life needs water that flows, neither dry nor frozen. I liked the last line about our "nestlings" and "hatching" freedom.

[Melanie]

I like your metaphor, "To wear a black coat of time". Good poem.

[Danik 2016]

Hi Ahmad,
The poem flows, like it was itself a stream of water. And the end sounds more hopeful than that of your former poems.

I hope things are a bit better about there.

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Hi Ahmad,
The poem flows, like it was itself a stream of water. And the end sounds more hopeful than that of your former poems.

I hope things are a bit better about there.

you hope me well , I would like to express my great full appreciation toward you as well as YesNo and Melanie
Indeed the conditions are still bad no rebuilding in my city and no states no politicians no man in the world seriously wants to do the necessary. Now my city especially the right side of it appears as a place of ghosts but my poetry will give away its generosity
thank you all