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Jerrybaldy
06-07-2017, 05:21 PM
Sleeping bag in the headlights
Body in the bag
Bearded shaking cold
Cardboard comfort
Nose drips
Tobacco dirty fingers
Pointed at those that have.
Triangle sandwich
P iss in pants
Pavement a ss
Useless dick
Coffee to warm fingers
Raindrops in littered puddles
Listening to sirens
And passing conversations
Meaningless.
Ring pull 6%
Spat upon shat upon
Wiser.

Haunted
06-11-2017, 06:57 PM
As punchy as I remember... Like how you ended it.

JonathanManley
06-12-2017, 04:59 AM
Really enjoyed reading this, especially:

''Listening to sirens
And passing conversations''

Honestly, I wasn't crazy about the last line, it felt a bit apologetic; though this poem as a whole reminded me of Don McCullin's 'Homeless Irishman' portrait

Thanks for sharing :)