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Doctor Omega
02-05-2017, 03:50 PM
I have never written a poem before.

But it's time that I stuck my foot through the door.

While deciding on exactly the right subject matter.

War, famine, food. Well, maybe the latter.

Or nothing at all?

A blank paper wall,

Filled with my thoughts on nowt.

A literary drought.

Maybe it's time

That my abstract rhyme

was shared in a daring display,

Of half-caring poetical mush,

That will never earn a payday.

So here it is,

Half-done, half-crap.

Hoping for praise, one of these days.

But more chance a critical slap.

So if you have read it.

I might need to edit,

This thing that has now been put down.

I wish I had thought of something more taught,

More drama to each singing line.

But no, it is bland as it spills from my hand

I might need a bottle of wine!

YesNo
02-05-2017, 07:41 PM
I enjoyed it. No "critical slap" here. But then I studied mathematics and not literature so I don't know jack.

Doctor Omega
02-05-2017, 09:30 PM
Thanks! :hurray:

I would like to go into a rambling essay about how every line was torn from my soul, but it just wouldn't be true! :biggrin5: