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OCDiscovery
09-23-2016, 04:43 AM
The wolf that leaves the pack,
Learns to live alone.
The sheep that leaves the flock,
Gets eaten to the bone.

A black sheep may have tricks and skills
But, the world is filled with people who kill.
Any sheep alone will never survive.
It must become a lone wolf to remain alive.




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YesNo
09-23-2016, 07:57 AM
The meter and rhyme in the first stanza worked well. The second stanza differed too much from the first. The idea seems worth exploring about the herding of the sheep and the isolation of the wolf.

Danik 2016
09-23-2016, 09:10 AM
Just musing about the content. The change from lone sheep to lone wolf (without being eaten in the process) seems complicated. But I agree with Yes/No. It is worth exploring.

VannesaSturges
10-26-2016, 09:46 AM
I want to live, Don't want to die
You alone sheep, now why you cry

VannesaSturges
10-26-2016, 09:46 AM
I was solid, I was rock
I was a dear in the flock