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BMistark
08-17-2016, 03:26 AM
The Zig


In Zaggar Zoo there was a Zig who liked to zigger zag
It zig and zagged across the crowds making people mad
Zig then zagged and zigged across the Zaggar Zoo
And infuriated a man so much he yelled at Zig till blue
"Zig why must you zag and zig across such an old man's path?
But Zig just zagged along through Zaggar Zoo with nothing but a laugh
Oh how Zig loved to zig zag through Zaggar Zoo
If you were Zig would you not love to zigger zag too?
But one day when Zig did zag he zigged zagged on a Zag that was big
And then Zag zigged and zagged in Zaggar Zoo on Zig
Zig cried out "Zag why you must zig and zag along my path?"
But Zag just zigged and zagged through Zagger Zoo with a laugh

YesNo
08-17-2016, 06:58 AM
Nice bit of zigging and zagging. The meter seemed off in places which stopped the flow for me but otherwise it zig zagged through.

BMistark
08-17-2016, 10:40 AM
Yes, admittedly I did not spend a whole lot on this poem unlike others. It's rather just a silly little poem I made for my daughter to entertain her yet remind her to think of others not just herself. She is 1 and 1/2 and laughs hysterically whenever I read it to her! :) thanks for reading! If your looking for a poem with a little more meaning and organization my other works might be better suited haha

Danik 2016
08-20-2016, 09:36 AM
I enjoyed this playful poem very much.

BMistark
08-20-2016, 02:25 PM
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading :)

tailor STATELY
08-20-2016, 02:30 PM
It's delightful... the meter zigs and zags too !

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

BMistark
08-20-2016, 04:58 PM
Thanks for reading tailor :) in sure I'll be writing yet another silly poem for my daughter soon an ill post it here!