Fish fingers

[Jerrybaldy]

Fish fingers for tea!
They don't have fingers
But that doesn't matter
You don't love me
Why would you
We can go on a bike ride
With warm orange squash
And squashed sandwiches
You're never going to love me
Stupid of me
I have a spot on my chin
And two on my nose
And if you loved me
I would know you're not for me.
Fish fingers for tea
Fish fingers for tea
As good as it ever gets
Fish fingers for tea.
As good as it can get
Fish fingers for tea.
As good as it got
Fingers of fish
They don't have fingers
Fish fingers for tea
Jeremy
Fish fingers for tea.

[YesNo]

I don't think I've ever had fish fingers, but then I looked them up and they are long, boxy objects that might have been deep-fried. They don't even look like fish let alone fingers. Well, maybe they look more like fingers than fish.

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed.

Ah, Fish sticks. Haven't had them for ages... loved them as a kid. Must put them on the menu soon. In retrospect the Doctor-1 (#11 officially) liked fish fingers and custard; I prefer them with catsup or tartar sauce.


Fish fingers


Fish fingers for tea!
They don't have fingers
But that doesn't matter
You don't love me
Why would you
We can go on a bike ride
With warm orange squash
And squashed sandwiches
You're never going to love me
Stupid of me
I have a spot on my chin
And two on my nose
And if you loved me
I would know you're not for me.
Fish fingers for tea
Fish fingers for tea
As good as it ever gets
Fish fingers for tea.
As good as it can get
Fish fingers for tea.
As good as it got
Fingers of fish
They don't have fingers
Fish fingers for tea
Jeremy
Fish fingers for tea.

On further review, stripped of fish fingers, a melancholy angst http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Angst

"But that doesn't matter
You don't love me
Why would you
We can go on a bike ride
With warm orange squash
And squashed sandwiches
You're never going to love me
Stupid of me
I have a spot on my chin
And two on my nose
And if you loved me
I would know you're not for me.
As good as it ever gets
As good as it can get
As good as it got"

"And if you loved me / I would know you're not for me. .. this brings to mind a quote a friend of mine employs attributed to Grouch Marx: "I refuse to join any club that would have me as a member".. a self deprecating attitude that only becomes tolerable as time passes.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Delta40]

This is good. Absent love, just like the illusory fish fingers, coupled with the yearning voice of middle age childhood. It doesn't get any better.

[JonathanManley]

Really enjoyed reading this, took me back to my teenage years when fish fingers were a staple of my diet, and unrequainted love (in varying degrees) was not uncommon! I'm not sure I can imagine a much worse combination now mind you

[Hawkman]

Hi JB.

It feel that this is a poem that would benefit immensely from being divided up into Tercets. As the line count is one short you could either emphasise the last two tines by making them singles, or perhaps cut one of the as good as it gets lines. By splitting the poem into three line verses it gives the imagery room to settle in the mind of the reader. It would give breathing room which, I feel, would enhance the poems impact. As it is, it sort of tumbles out as a bit of a manic rant which slips by too quickly, like the verges of a motorway seen from the window of a car doing 80 mph.

Live and be well - H

[Jerrybaldy]

Thank you all for commenting. Particular thanks to tailor for such a considered dissection. Thank you Hawk also and although the advice I'm sure is good its just a few lines sinking with the rest :) But most of all thank you all for taking the time.

[prendrelemick]

Ah, nostalgia. Lovely.
Reminds me of Rupert Brookes' honey for tea.