Unrequited Love

[Delta40]

I love people who make me laugh. I honestly think it’s the thing I like most, to laugh. It cures a multitude of ills it’s probably the most important thing in a person. – Audrey Hepburn

In between the waves of laughter
a fishing pole with bait is dangled from
the edge and here am I distracted, happy,
ready to leap, lunge like a fish for whatever morsel,
hoping too you might bite back as I leave
part of me hanging and the rest unsaid - how
sand finding its way into every crack means
far more than you appreciate.
Back at home, I switch off my phone
and pace the verandahs of my mind
to clicking cicadas and cackling cockatoos.
Stop, Stop, Stop!
-there really is no such thing as peace;
and in the mock silence
I drink in the blazing sunset.
Finally
I see.
I hear.
I know.
One push and truth splashes onto my feet,
quivering like a washed up jellyfish;
painful to the touch.

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Is't yours dear Delta? The title "Unrequited Love" I noticed in many pages especially on GoodRead but methinks that's not your style; please if not you refer to its owner just to know to whom belongs. I saw that you have quoted something another one said but you didn't refer that this poem to him.
best wishes
I want you at a good day

[Delta40]

The poem is mine. Perhaps the title isn't so original.

[Danik 2016]

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[YesNo]

I liked this part "lunge like a fish for whatever morsel,
hoping too you might bite back" and the ending with truth landing like a painful jellyfish.

[Delta40]

Danik, your poetry cannot be viewed as an honest, genuine critique of my work.

Thanks, YesNo.

[Danik 2016]

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[Delta40]

Hi, Delta!
But I´m not critizising your poem, neither honestly nor otherwise! It was just meant to be another poem to a similar theme. I just answered a poem with another one as I have done before in this pagees. Some people like this kind of dialogue but if it bothers you I`ll take it out again, as the thread is yours. But before I do, I want to state very clearly that no mischief was meant.

:willy_nilly: Lol. I'm struggling with form atm so I'm seeing everything as feedback. But be my guest since it makes you happy. :wave:

[Danik 2016]

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[Delta40]

...:biggrin5:...

[Delta40]

I'm new at this forum and I´m not so sure as yet how all the threads work. I read somewhere a recomendation from Logos asking us not to open a thread for each poem and the theme somehow inspired me. But I´ll be more carefull from now on.

I know what you mean. I get inspired by other poems too, so why not start a thread for your own poems Danik? That way your work won't hide in the wings so to speak. You can still comment on poetry but put your inspiration to good use in a thread entirely yours.

[Danik 2016]

Sorry, don´t know how to delete them completelY. The System keeps asking for aminimal message.

[Delta40]

My pleasure. Some people create one thread and regularly post poems in it but most like me have one poem per thread. You already have two poems you could paste into your very own thread Danik and await reviews.