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cacian
02-09-2016, 06:54 AM
happiness
is a round
of applause
to love that fulfills
no flaws

because when
a feeling enters a
course
it is may
and may not
rose
to the typical
clause
that forever is
chose
and so
to achieve those
is a stand of ovation
pause

everyone is in aura
of amoral
the euphoric
in plural

YesNo
02-09-2016, 09:01 AM
I liked the idea in the first stanza: that happiness is a round of applause. It makes me think it is something we give rather than get. You have a surprising way of putting words together while maintaining an interesting sound.

PeterL
02-09-2016, 02:39 PM
I am glad that you wrote about yourself. :)

cacian
02-10-2016, 06:02 AM
thank you YesNo and Peter :)