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CoverTheSun
11-23-2015, 04:20 PM
'I cant stand this poison you are spitting at me' he says

Baby, dont you know
Im full of it.
Toxic levels of hate, anger and fear
Radiate from me for miles all around me,
in neon green dirty steam that breathes itself into the roots
of my hair,
and the crevices in my palms,
in the laughter lines around my mouth.
That poison is bone deep.
My blood is full of it.
Its lukewarm and separated,
like an oil and water reaction.
The poison is suspended above everything else,
suffocating the red blood cells beneath it
that just want to feel something human.
Its not still and circulating.
Its sloshing and bubbling
shaking , shivering, trembling
the waves rise, crash and toxins
spill out of me.
My pores leak,
they widen and drip acid.
Not the fun kind.
The type that erodes cement and leaves
deep red fleshy burns down my cheeks.

I wish it would eat me alive,
swallow me,
Burn me out completely.

But it doesn't stop there.
When i breathe, it flies
in tiny flecks from the corner of my mouth.

Acid rain.
On everyone i love.
Not the fun kind.
The kind that destroys families.
That leaks from batteries.
That ruins everything
I get close to.

tailor STATELY
11-23-2015, 04:59 PM
Your protagonist is believable; though such darkness I can't imagine.

The last stanza pretty much summed up your poem for me:

Acid rain.
On everyone i love.
Not the fun kind.
The kind that destroys families.
That leaks from batteries.
That ruins everything
I get close to.

Oh! and welcome back !

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

Delta40
11-26-2015, 08:32 PM
It's good description. Self-hatred defined yet as humans we nevertheless 'read' a cry for help in the lines.

prendrelemick
11-27-2015, 07:01 AM
Terrific. (modern and archaic)