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MystyrMystyry
04-13-2015, 01:52 AM
Get out of bed and stretch those legs
Fry that bacon, fry those eggs
Make your morning ablutions
Check your daily resolutions
Over a steaming pot of coffee
March out the door in a jiffee
Confidently stride down the street
Doff your hat to all you meet
Reach the bus stop just in time
From pockets fish out a dime
Congratulations you're a working stiff
Question your motives, and don't forget to ask

What if? What if? What if?

YesNo
04-13-2015, 08:34 AM
You only need a dime for the bus? :)

I liked the ending and the rhyme there emphasizing, through repetition, "stiff".

AuntShecky
04-16-2015, 03:11 PM
I like the unique speling of "jiffee" so it matches up with "coffee." This is a cute humorous piece with a serious theme.
Nice job.

DieterM
04-17-2015, 06:21 AM
God – I don't take a bus nor do I wear a hat, but as for the rest… seems as if you'd been watching my very morning moves, day after day! Including the "What if what if what if…"-theme going round and round in my head. Loved this one, M.! Thanks for sharing :-)

MystyrMystyry
04-27-2015, 09:45 PM
Thamkyou YesNo :)

MystyrMystyry
04-27-2015, 09:46 PM
Thankyou Aunty :)

MystyrMystyry
04-27-2015, 09:47 PM
Thanks Dieter :)