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free
03-12-2015, 05:08 AM
Ann was walking along the mountain fields filled with colorful flowers. The day was warm, beautiful and sunny. The air was saturated with smells of wild flowers. She kept holding her hat, and the scarf around her neck was slightly dancing on the breeze. She could hear buzzing of bees flying around flowers and singing of birds from a nearby forest. The expression on her face was a mixture of infatuation with this beautiful surrounding and some deep meditation.

- Ann...

She heard a voice, almost a whisper, from vicinity.

She turned slowly and, right behind her back, she saw beautiful, warm eyes of the young man she met last evening...

Mrs. Greene stopped dictating while I was typing her novel.

I had got this job a few days ago and enjoyed it enormously. It was as if I was the first reader in the world of a wonderful book.

- What do you think about the story so far?

She asked.

Mrs. Greene was not so famous writer, but I was sure that she was going to become it.

I was surprised with her question and really afraid not to tell something wrong. I did not want to loose this job because, at that time, I was student and I needed money.

After a long thinking, I dared to breathe. But, before I said anything, she warned me.

- I want an honest answer, Clare. Don't be afraid that I would fire you because of that.

She laughed. I laughed, too, because it looked like she had read my thoughts.

- Weeell...

I started hesitatingly.

- It's a bit immoral.

I whispered timidly what I really thought.

She was surprised.

- What do you mean 'immoral'?

- Ann is a married woman and, on the mountain, she meets a young man with whom is she, obviously, going to fall in love...

Mrs. Greene burst into laughter.

- Oh, my.... but, you are so old fashioned, young lady!

She exclaimed.

- OK, but how are we going to make a plot? It must be romantic and beautiful, you know...

She looked at me with her big, dark eyes and her black heavy hair was shining under the sun coming through the window of her study.

free
03-15-2015, 12:45 PM
I did not know what to answer to this. How to make an interesting plot providing that nobody gets hurt? If the story continued as Mrs. Greene had started it, Ann's husband would have been hurt.

Mrs. Greene kept quiet for awhile, she looked around the room, then she looked through the window, then again around, and, finally she said:

- Find the page where Chapter Five is.

I scrolled the page on the laptop screen down and found the wanted Chapter in which it was written that Ann was packing her luggage to go to the mountain, and Mrs. Greene said:

- Delete it and write.

Dictation started towards different direction. Ann's friend, Stella, was introduced into the story and at that point she invited Ann to join her and go to the mountain.

So, at he begining of this story of mine, to the name Ann is added 'Ann and Stella were walking along the mountain fields, and where a young man's 'whisper' is heard the whispered name is not Ann, but Stella.

When this was done, Mrs. Greene took a small mirror from her handbag standing on a nearby armchair and placed it in front of my face.

- Look at you.

I looked at the mirror and then at Mrs. Greene without understanding.

- Why?

I asked.

- Look how pleased you are.

She said and we both laughed. Really, my face was smiling what I was completely unaware of.

108 fountains
03-17-2015, 01:14 PM
I've come to really enjoy your style, free. Subtle little vignettes of life that make me smile, just like the narrator of this one.
Also, I think you did a good job with the "story within a story" comcept. A lot of writers try this and end up just confusing the reader. In this case, even though you started it off with a a reading from the book (the story within the story), you made it clear right away what was going on and I was never confused with where the action was taking place.

free
03-18-2015, 04:33 AM
I've come to really enjoy your style, free. Subtle little vignettes of life that make me smile, just like the narrator of this one.
Also, I think you did a good job with the "story within a story" comcept. A lot of writers try this and end up just confusing the reader. In this case, even though you started it off with a a reading from the book (the story within the story), you made it clear right away what was going on and I was never confused with where the action was taking place.

Thank you, 108 fountains, for reading and commenting. I am so glad you've enjoyed it. :)