frisson fracas the way back up

[cacian]

the concept of freedom
that makes a minute
turns
it becomes earn
honest and firm
is in the mind
it is not the body
too stuck and woody
the movement's
locked
or
something
somebody
is bogged the view
ahead is mugged
seeing is losing
it is the thought
random and fraught
forward and brought
backward onslaught
stopping
you moving
be yourself groovy
apply a smoothy
remove the moody

[NikolaiI]

Hi Cacian,

I just wanted to say this was fascinating, and I enjoyed it. . a lot of unique expression as always - to me it contained a lot of information and messages and while I am not sure I necessarily got exactly the message you wished to convey - what I did see in it was great.

(forgive me for not being specific - sometimes I am, but sometimes I am just lazy and say this was such a cool poem)

[cacian]

Nikolail so glad you enjoyed this.
thank you for reading and the lovely feedback. :)

[prendrelemick]

I like the way the rhymes come at you from all directions