a poem by jerrybaldy

[Jerrybaldy]

So barren
The milky yolk of sunlight
The sandcastle Queen
Just kisses and smiles
The beach runs scared
For golden miles.

So desperate
The snuffed out heart
This chilled and salty air
This silly f ucking soft boy
Deep grey ocean stare.

[YesNo]

Unless I misunderstood, it is how a sad walker on the beach feels while thinking everyone else is having fun. I enjoyed it.

[Bar22do]

It seems to have been your Birthday (well, a while ago, didn't notice - Happy Birthday!)

Your poem is so quietly sad I feel like running there to the beach and stop the boy from making the next step toward the water...
Bleak, bleak... Schoenberg would have written for it a fascinating music.

Thank you and best as always.
Bar

[Jerrybaldy]

Here is what has been plagiarized by Dorothy Hernandez. I posted this in 2015 as you can see

[kiz_paws]

Well not only did "Dorothy" plagiarize, she mutilated your poem.

Thank you for straightening this out, YOUR poem was beautifully sad and very well written.

[Hawkman]

What Kiz said ^_^ - H