revival

[cacian]

in a day or
two
the sky can blue
and the air can
flew
so birds can strew
to a flight
of crew
seasonal mew

but in a year or two
the mountains
can grew
and the sea can due
thousands of hue
so the moon
can cue
to see the world take
new
revival a view

changes are lieu
spontaneous and few
so lightness can slew
to a ritual of true
it is nature's pew
sitting down
may
stew

[NikolaiI]

It's so good to see you again, cacian!

I was absent for like a year, and when I came back, so many people who were staples of the community were gone, but anyway it's great to see you around again!

Today I saw several of your new poems, I enjoyed them all very much.

As a turn of poetry,
"We look revived
but
feel denied."

was a really exquisite touch.

I enjoyed this poem a lot.
You use words in a very unique way, and it takes a while for me to understand what you are saying -

but then anything worth saying is worth saying in metaphor. And also, it's always good to work to develop one's ability at seeing beauty in works of art or in life.

It's really fascinating, and really quite good cacian. Thank you! :-)

[NikolaiI]

It's really beautiful and I think of one thing, which is the vastness of some of the things you mention, like bringing the moon into it.. brings the vastness of that object into the poem. . and a lot can be said with a few simple words.

The test for a poem for me really is how many times do I want to, or can I read it and still enjoy it fully? This is definitely one that is very readable, and attracts the reader back to reading it again.

Well done, keep 'em coming!

[cacian]

Nikolai thank you for the positive words. it is lovely to read them.
it is worth every poem.
i am so glad you are back after a long absence and thank you for welcoming me back.
i liked your idea of poetry in the contest forum. it gives writing another meaning and so yes i posted there too.
hope to read more of your work too.
i enjoyed reading your entry by the way it is fun and refreshing :)