Fun with rythm

[Aperta Verbum]

I fear for my sanity

Rationalistic determinism is logical analysis
all things appear the way celestial mechanics is
The logistics and specifics of a universe in motion
complex dynamics of fluids through the ocean
A pragmatic pendulum providing constant evolution
and yet as man we have found no solution

Because it all falls apart the deeper that we go
As our knowledge of the quantum is only so-so
Epistemological empiricism creates an odd reality
where everything that happens remains superficiality
A conundrum of states both positive and parallels
create ecumenical futuristic parables

Regard your world with question and contempt
as ethical moralities through power circumvent
But remember one thing inescapable and true
that order is to chaos perfection through and through

Aperta Verbum

[free]

I like the idea and sometimes I apply it in my poems: to give some scientific (or other) truths in a poem using rhymes as a poetic tool. Rhymes are not in use much in poetry now. But in this case, they are welcome.

[miyako73]

"Rationalistic determinism" is too much in a poem. I gave up after "celestial mechanics". I don't think poetry is a verbiage invented to mentally torture and verbally confuse. Thank you for posting this. Philosophy buffs may welcome and appreciate this.

[Aperta Verbum]

The subject matter was not as important as the sound rhythm, tbh I appreciate what you are saying but the intention was not to verbally confuse nor mentally torture. It was supposed to have a fun sound pattern.

My greatest shame is that I misspelled rhythm on the title, and didn't proof read lol.

[miyako73]

"Rationalistic determinism is logical analysis
all things appear the way celestial mechanics is
The logistics and specifics of a universe in motion
complex dynamics of fluids through the ocean
A pragmatic pendulum providing constant evolution
and yet as man we have found no solution"

"celestial mechanics is the logistics and specifics of a universe in motion"

What do you mean exactly?

Even your "a universe in motion" implies that there are other universes. Wow! I didn't know that.