My wonderful state of nothingness

[Mihai]

Hi! I'm new here, I never gave too much thought to writing, but this small piece turned out and I'd love an honest opinion about it, thanks!

There they were, drinking, laughing, having a good time. Their eyes were joyful, but empty. And empty eyes cannot be hidden, not even by the liveliest laughter. They tried to make me one of them. -Come here, have a drink with us, they said. But I could not, as I stood there paralyzed. And it was not out of fear, or any other form of emotion, but for lack of interest in that pitiful world. I was slowly drifting away into my own personal void. My thoughts scattered, my mind wondered, but my body was still and it felt beautiful. From time to time I'd politely fake a smile and pretend I'm there, but that didn't bother me, because I knew that soon enough I could wonder off into my beautiful state of nothingness.

[DATo]

Your story, though quite short, illustrates a feeling I think we have all experienced at one time or another - the idea that we do not wish to be involved in the social circumstances with which we are confronted. The story is a snapshot of such an event and illustrates the narrator's solution to this problem by withdrawing into his/her own inner self.

Nice job!

[Mihai]

Thanks for reading it and for liking it!

[abnormalalien]

Agreeing with DATo, I think you managed to capture that land we all escape to when we just can't or don't want to deal with something. It's like a coping mechanism I would expect. I suggest that you replace the word wonder with wander in the last sentence because I think that's what you meant to say. Related, you said "my mind wondered" in the previous sentence. Not sure if you meant wandered there as well but I would nix using it twice in two sentences.