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Carousel
01-18-2015, 07:48 AM
At a desk (centre right) Manny Goldstein is counting a pile of gold coins.

Knock
MANNY hurriedly clears the coins into a leather bag.

Come in why don’t you"

ENTER Stage right
WILLIAM SHAKESPEAR.

MANNY, "Will, what a pleasure, I was only saying to Rosie the other day, such a long time since we saw our dear old friend".

SHAKESPEAR, "Cut the cobblers Manny, what about the play I sent you three months ago"?

MANNY. "Ah you mean the new one, what was it now? I have it here somewhere".

Rummages among a pile of papers

”Here it is A Midsummer’s Night Scream”

SHAKESPEAR. "DREAM you prawn, its dream".

MANNY. "Ah I see it now, the old eyes Will, not what they used to be"

SHAKESPEAR. "Really, well have you read it"?

MANNY. "Would I lie to an old friend, of course I have"

SHAKESPEAR. "Well"?

MANNY. "I gota be honest with you Will. I mean its not one of you’re usual ones is it"?

SHAKESPEAR. "So"?

MANNY. "Bums on seats Will, bums on seats. Look couldn’t you knock out another King play, they always go down well".

SHAKESPEAR. "No, I’m fed up Kings”

MANNY. "Romeo then, they loved that one, the Italian chick what was her name"?

SHAKESPEAR. “ Juliet”

MANNY. “That’s the one, she was a right scream. When Sid missed his entrance,
Romeo, Romeo wherefore art thou Romeo-----, Romeo, Romeo where the bleedin well are you Romeo. And when she fell off the balcony, red skirt and no drawers, he, he, he”.


SHAKESPEAR “It was meant to be a tragedy; I don’t know why I bother, I suppose it was your idea to replace the Montague’s and Capulet’s with the Hetro’s versa the Gays in the fight scene”.

MANNY. “Yeah, good twist that, we were sold out for three months. Come on Will, another Romeo will be a Gas”.

SHAKESPEAR. "And how do you suggest I raise Romeo from the dead"?

MANNY "What"?

SHAKESPEAR. "The last act you idiot, Romeo is DEAD, He has ceased to be! 'he's expired and gone to meet 'is maker! 'he's a stiff! Bereft of life, 'he rests in peace! 'he's kicked the bucket, 'he's shuffled off 'is mortal coil, run down the curtain and joined the bleedin' choir invisible!!"

MANNY "OK, OK What about ‘Son of Romeo"

SHAKESPEAR. "What about Midsummer’s Night Dream"?

MANNY "It’s about a bunch of fairies Will"

SHAKESPEAR. "So, what’s wrong with fairies"?

MANNY “Nothing Will, I get on with all sorts but the Rose is in the East End, tough area Will, they er don’t go down well over there"”

SHAKESPEAR. “You haven’t even read it have you? They’re not that kind of fairies you moron, they're real fairies, wings and everything".

MANNY "Real fairies? Oh no Will No, No, No".

SHAKESPEAR. Snatches up the manuscript

"Right I’ll take it down to Clarence at the Globe, you’ll see, it will be a smash and I’ve got an idea for a follow up too, about a kid who goes to a wizards school".

SHAKESPEAR. Leaves stage left.

Manny bursts into laughter and wipes his eyes “Fairies, Elves, bleedin Wizards, poor old Will, he’s finally flipped.”

Curtain Down.

Hawkman
01-18-2015, 08:48 AM
Hi Carousel.

This is quite amusing, if a little brief, but it's also highly derivative and liberally sprinkled with borrowings. Monty Python and the Shakespeare Sketch by Rowan Atkinson and Hugh Laurie http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=IwbB6B0cQs4 are obvious inspirations and clearly referred to in the dialogue. Consequently, it lacks originality. It is funny, but knowing where the idea comes from (and recognising lines) undermines the humour, I feel. Famous playwrights v agents is a subject that's been fairly well rehearsed in humorous sketches, so to impress you need to come up with a novel approach. Intertextuality is all well and good, but this feels a bit lazy. Re the Bard, you might like to check out my, "A Writer's Tale," which is posted on this forum, and which demonstrates what you can do with intertextuality in an original story.

Live and be well - H

Carousel
01-18-2015, 10:06 AM
Actually I wrote this before I saw the Atkinson sketch of making cuts in Hamlet. Of course the Python bit from the parrot sketch fitted and was too good to miss. It’s hard to be original in humour, didn’t someone say there are only seven jokes, all the rest are variations of the same themes.

Thanks for reading.

Calidore
01-18-2015, 10:48 AM
Many, many people haven't found it hard to be original in humor (the Pythons, Atkinson, and Fry & Laurie to name a few :) ), despite how many basic jokes there may be. Others have said the same about story plots. Originality is about effort, IMO, not availability. If you find yourself simply rehashing something, try looking at it from a different angle to find another approach.

DATo
01-18-2015, 11:02 AM
{{{{ LAUGHING MY A$$ OFF HERE }}}}

Absolutely loved it. As Hawkie says, "a little brief", but sweet.

You have an excellent grasp of comic delivery. I'm so jealous I could spit *LOLOLOLOLOLOL*

Encore !!!! Encore !!!!

AuntShecky
01-22-2015, 04:48 PM
This piece seemed eerily familiar to me, and then I remembered a Twilight Zone episode starring Jack Weston as a hack writer to whom Shakespeare suddenly appears. Originally airing in 1963, the episode is
titled "The Hack." (http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0734630/reviews) As you can see, it received mixed reviews.

It's terribly frustrating to think you've come up with something startingly original, only to discover that somebody got there first several decades ago! Believe me, I know the feeling. The only way you can attempt to prevent such things from happening is to read everything you can. Research pop culture items. That's what search engines are for.

Keep those creative juices flowing as well and keep trying.

Auntie


http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0734630/reviews