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SOul23
11-09-2014, 08:21 PM
You, my young love , who awoke myself from innocence,

I gave you my heart, full of passion inside.

When I first caught your eyes; it was all I could do.

To not be so bold, and not turn away.

The sparkle in your gaze, told me this was okay.

So, I walked up to you, and told you my name.

Giving me pleasure since we first shared "that look",

Quickly growing my passion inside

a Sea of emotions Awaken to feelings a new.

Exploring the magical way in which one learns to love

curiosity, joy, expectation are our guides

and when I finally holding your hand ,

I feel that special warmth and you begin to alter my senses

Once again, again I feel alive, refreshed and renewed,

You’re keep my mind in such suspense!

Making life the flavor of love.

YesNo
11-09-2014, 10:13 PM
Maybe, "Suspense"? That seemed to stand out for me.

I think part of the first line would sound better as,"who awoke me from my innocence", but I might be wrong.

SOul23
11-10-2014, 08:19 AM
Good suggestion!