Backyards and Bathroom Mirrors

[Delta40]

In the bathroom
We reflect
How little we
Value each other
Yet look at me
Watching you
Keeping a firm grip
On your reality

So come
Make a spectacle
I can behold
Since it feels so good

Back here in the yard
I kneel as
I delve
Into the thick overgrowth
And hit the spot
So I truly appreciate
The great distance
Between us

[Hawkman]

Keep knocking back the Chateau Nuit St. Wagga Wagga to keep the neurones firing on all cylinders, Delta. You're on a roll! A nice reflective piece pondering on the relationship between the subject and the eidolon. Or possibly tending the grave of the ex, or hope, or any of the above ;). Seriously, though, I like the crispness and precision of this piece. Very expressive and concise. Much enjoyed.

Live and be well - H

[Mohammad Ahmad]

A man when his real size is mirrored on his eyes will rethink to see life is just an empty bubble and will be got amazing to see everything is out of sorrow!
To appreciate the real distance of such a shadow though the environment whether at a conversation or just with a oneself-talk this means you aren't surrendered but furthermore you are in the understanding point.

[Jerrybaldy]

Very insightful Delta. There seems to be smoke and mirrors here too. It's a very clever piece of writing. I enjoyed it x

[AuntShecky]

What they said. ^^^

[DieterM]

Can only agree with all the praise above, dear D. :-) ^^^

[Delta40]

Thanks for the reviews everyone. Apologies for not responding. I think you're right Hawk about the phantom aspect and the poem does have a smoke and mirror effect. I especially like the grave image which fits quite well. One of the enjoyments I get from writing is producing work which is flexible enough in its interpretation without losing meaning if that makes sense.

[blank|verse]

Am I the only one to read this poem as being about sex - first with her partner, then with herself - or does that just say more about me as a reader? :)

[Carousel]

I’m with you friend, why use a metaphor that relates to shall we say size if you don’t give it any credence.
But nevertheless a highly enjoyable piece to read and enjoy.

[Jerrybaldy]

Welcome back blank|verse. I have very much missed your intuitive eye.

[Scheherazade]

Back here in the yard
I kneel as
I delve
Into the thick overgrowth
And hit the spot
So I truly appreciate
The great distance
Between usI especially like the meanings (and interpretations) ripe within this final part... Regardless of age, one can -and does- enjoy the whatever left of the physical body.

Since you do not use punctuation, Delta, I wonder why you capitalise each line... This is not a criticism or even a suggestion but a mere question out of curiosity to hear your thoughts.

[Delta40]

More interesting interpretations. They all read marvelously well and give me great satisfaction. Scher my word program does it automatically and I rather like the format. Thanks for the reviews everyone.

[free]

It seems like a comparison between what we think and what we see. Like when you imagine yourself and see yourself in a mirror. That is why, I suppose, 'the appreciation' of 'the distance' between them at the poem's end.

Nice poem, Delta.


Since you do not use punctuation, Delta, I wonder why you capitalise each line... This is not a criticism or even a suggestion but a mere question out of curiosity to hear your thoughts.

I do the same in my poems. I don't really know why. Maybe to give to the poetry something more to differentiate it from prose, after it (the poetry) has lost some of its earlier specificities (like rhyme, for instance).

[Delta40]

I'm terrible at rhyme. For the most part I find them boring to read unless they're quirky. I do however appreciate the great skill required to write a good one. Probably not enough or I wouldn't say they are boring! I got into Shakespeare and Canterbury Tales for a while and read McGonagall for a laugh but it's simply not my style.