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Delta40
10-10-2014, 09:12 PM
The jellyfish stings
And now I have
A dot to dot
From my calf
To my thigh
And I was thinking
About all the
Possible pictures
I could draw
From this one story
Where I might laugh
About the pain
Now it has been
Left behind
On my favourite beach
To dry up
In the midday sun

Jerrybaldy
10-14-2014, 04:47 PM
I like how it reads as a single sentence whilst showcasing its metaphor on the sand x

Hawkman
10-14-2014, 05:05 PM
Very crisp, Delta. A nicely self-contained moment. I really like it.

Bar22do
10-18-2014, 03:09 AM
Wonderful, Delta!
(well, as usual...)
Bar

AuntShecky
10-19-2014, 12:34 AM
Not only that, it looks really good on the virtual page.