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yosimity
09-01-2014, 10:05 AM
One I started a few years ago, but trying to work on it lately.

The Solitary One
TJ Cook

In the moonlight, He stands alone.
His heart beating in the harmony
To the creatures of the night.

He is not one of their kind
Or one of the fabled monsters
From our childhood,
That dwelled outside our windows
During the long dark nights that
We soon forget as we grow older;

But he hailed as one of their own just the same.
As at home in the darkness as any owl or bat.
Once dwelling in the daylight,
But in his long search for happiness
His Mood became sable.

Gradually, the night
Adopted him as brother.
Giving him comfort when he found none.
He feared not evil in the night
From man nor beast.
And found that evil
Was not the nights true nature
But that the night was just used by evil
As a mask when it suited it's needs.

He stands alone - The Solitary One -
As the full moon shines
Down from the night sky
And the spirits of the darkness call

Upon his knees, the darkness is lifted
He realizes the he was never
Alone in the night.
That the three were there all along.
The Father, The Son and The Holy Ghost.

tailor STATELY
09-01-2014, 06:19 PM
Howdy!

Enjoyed. A work in progress is a labor of love. I still go over my poetry/prose with revisions (see one of my latest at https://sites.google.com/site/apoetingardenvalley/ "The Road Not Ken: Ta !": an anagram, line by line, of the famous poem "The Road Not Taken" by Robert Frost, for instance).

Being more a minimalist at heart I might sculpt here a little, re-arrange there a little; line upon line.


Was not the nights true nature
• "nights">"night's" prolly more apropos.

• L4/L5 not/or perhaps better as not/nor.


As a mask when it suited it's needs.
• "it's">"its" prolly more correct.

Thank you for sharing.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY