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free
07-21-2014, 10:37 AM
You are so beautiful
Every sentence you say
Makes me get up
From the chair
Where I sit
And look at you

Makes me want
To support you sincerely
In the stanzas
Of the poetry
And rise you up
To reach the highest of the thrones

From where you will shine
From where you will
Dissolve the darkness
Of your previous absence
PeterL
07-26-2014, 10:34 AM
I'm glad that you are writing about yourself.
It makes me want to hold you close and smell your hair.
free
07-27-2014, 03:54 AM
Haha... In fact, it is not about me, I don't think I am beautiful. But, I've already forgotten who was it about. Must be a momentary inspiritation.
PeterL
07-27-2014, 09:57 AM
Deny all you want, but that doesn't change anything. It is nice to know that you are beautiful. :)
Marbles
07-27-2014, 03:21 PM
Deny all you want, but that doesn't change anything. It is nice to know that you are beautiful. :)

Darn, this is so cheesy.
YesNo
07-27-2014, 03:30 PM
I liked the last two lines about dissolving the darkness of your absence.
deletedilute
07-28-2014, 09:03 PM
I like the simplicity and can definitely see your talent but would recommend a more creative/nuanced/personal title. It threw me off a bit because it sounded like every young adult / cliche poem ever , which it isn't.
free
07-29-2014, 02:15 AM
Deny all you want, but that doesn't change anything. It is nice to know that you are beautiful. :)

Well, noboy can deny what somebody doesn't want to be denied :). Maybe I have a manlike mind. I've noticed that men don't like to be liked for their beauty. They'd rather be liked for their minds. On the other hand, women like to be liked for their beauty.

And, yes, I've remembered who is the poem devoted to. To the truth.
free
07-29-2014, 02:16 AM
I liked the last two lines about dissolving the darkness of your absence.

Thanks, YesNo.
free
07-29-2014, 02:17 AM
I like the simplicity and can definitely see your talent but would recommend a more creative/nuanced/personal title. It threw me off a bit because it sounded like every young adult / cliche poem ever , which it isn't.

Thanks, deletedilute.
cacian
07-29-2014, 05:10 AM
this is a beautiful poem free.
and never say you are not beautiful.
those who feel beauty say it. ;)
PeterL
07-29-2014, 08:10 AM
Well, nobody can deny what somebody doesn't want to be denied :). Maybe I have a manlike mind. I've noticed that men don't like to be liked for their beauty. They'd rather be liked for their minds. On the other hand, women like to be liked for their beauty.

And, yes, I've remembered who is the poem devoted to. To the truth.

Man like to be admired by beautiful women for any reason at all, or no reason. :)
Yes, you are also truth, at least in this matter.
tailor STATELY
07-29-2014, 08:19 AM
Gaiety and grace.

Beautiful poem free.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
free
07-30-2014, 02:48 AM
this is a beautiful poem free.
and never say you are not beautiful.
those who feel beauty say it. ;)

Thanks, cacian. We are all beautiful. :)
free
07-30-2014, 02:53 AM
Man like to be admired by beautiful women for any reason at all, or no reason. :)
Yes, you are also truth, at least in this matter.

Is that so? Than they didn't find me beautiful. My admiration of their beauty was refused and I thought that they prefered not to be perceived like that. Now, I am going to pity myself. But, thanks, for opening my eyes. :)
free
07-30-2014, 02:55 AM
Gaiety and grace.

Beautiful poem free.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

Thank you, tailor. Nice words.