lustfull

[cacian]

desire is a flower
that grows like a fyre
but then
when the wind blows
rain
the heat lowers
drain
the ashes
from the rade
luminous they may laid
scatter
and then saine

to the left
lures an image
to the right
looms an homage
but to the center
throws a lane

another flower
another hour
inlays and
power
to admire again
ideal to a same.

to burn out
lustful
is a waste of an aim.

[Pumpkin337]

'rane' and 'saine'???

[cacian]

'rane' and 'saine'???

do you mean rade?
that is another spelling for ride

saine
another spelling for
sane
I like to spell it with an I.

[Pumpkin337]

sorry yes 'rade' darn spellcheck - need to the irritating thing off!

I will give you 'rade' as obscure as it is - but 'saine' no. You may like to spell it with an 'i' but ...

this poems hovers on the edge of making some kind of sense but in the end just doesn't :( which is a pity because there is something there, lurking .... if only you could coax it from hiding a bit better.

[cacian]

sorry yes 'rade' darn spellcheck - need to the irritating thing off!

I will give you 'rade' as obscure as it is - but 'saine' no. You may like to spell it with an 'i' but ...

this poems hovers on the edge of making some kind of sense but in the end just doesn't :( which is a pity because there is something there, lurking .... if only you could coax it from hiding a bit better.

Pumpkin337 I understand.
I will see if I can work it again and thank you. :)

I have reworked it a bit more is it any slight better?