god

[cacian]

to god and me
I am the meaning
but to me to
god
I am the hearing,
a solitude
of air
and a distant
fair
for a
god that
care.
if he is not here
then I am there.

[WolfLarsen]

I think it would be stronger without the rhymes at the end.

I liked the first half of the poem.

Of course, I like that god does not appear capitalized.

[cacian]

Wolf and thank you for reading.
I agree with you about the rhyme.
I have removed the last two lines :)

[PeterL]

You understand why I don't bother with small "g" god; I prefer the real Gods and Goddesses.

[cacian]

You understand why I don't bother with small "g" god; I prefer the real Gods and Goddesses.

I do now haha :)

[YesNo]

I liked the last two lines with "here" and "there".

[cacian]

I liked the last two lines with "here" and "there".

YesNo thank you :)