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06-13-2014, 01:47 AM
Trying something new, and gauging interest for it. I'm opening up a story with an excerpt from a chatlog. For some context, this is for a detective story that takes place in the future, at the advent of FTL travel. Humanity has colonized the stars, but this device will finally make interstellar travel practical. However, somebody doesn't want the maiden voyage of the first commercial FTL ship to go according to plan. Due to the time distortion of FTL travel, Cassandra hits its destination planet and destroys it before even leaving the station. Now, the security guard Brook Fleming, finds herself teamed up with Eric Murphy as their ship hurtles towards doom. They have only a few hours to stop whatever disaster befell the ship, before it happens.
Good idea? Bad idea?
CASSANDRA PROJECT PERSONNEL IRC LOG
date:june/3/2588
12:41
JFORD: who's excited? Seriously guys, this will be huge
AMASIH: *Whose
JFORD: Ha ha, <CENSORED> you, Masih.
AMASIH: Get in line, Captain.
ADMIN_1: If you gentlemen are quite done, could we get this underway? We're about to make history, and I'd appreciate it if
ADMIN_1: you didn't embarrass yourselves in front of the whole galaxy. (Oops hit enter too early :P)
AMASIH: No problem, were just waitin for ford to get his <CENSORED> up to the bridge.
AMASIH: Also, please, for <CENSORED>'s sake, turn of the profanity filter. Were not 12 yrs old
JFORD: On my way. Also, its *We're, not were
LGARRET: OH< COME AT ME <CENSORED>ES, I AM SO READY FOR A GRAMMER FIGHT
ADMIN_2: @ford, you on the bridge yet?
JFORD: Yeah, just got on the lift. we clear 4 takeout?
JFORD: *Takeout
JFORD: DAmmit, TAKEOFF.
ADMIN_2: Dinner later, captain ford. For now, jsut get your ship off the ground. Hans can engage ftl as soon as youre out of atmo.
JFORD: Ok, dock loks disgaged, were lifting off. @admin what should our alt be when we go ftl>
ADMIN_1: alt>500 kilm we dont want you frying any stalactites
ADMIN_1: *Satellites. <CENSORED>ing schizo autocorrect.
HWEISS: Altitud at 250 kilomters. well be clear to leave in ~~ 2 mins
ADMIN_2: Funny how accorrect doesnt fix 'altitud” but it thinks satellites==stalactites. leaving frank 2 handle rest of takeoff, I gotta go.
JFORD: Ahhh that sucks, your gunna miss the launch1
ADMIN_1: Yeah, command called him over for somethin. Sucks 2 be alan.
HWEISS: Ok, we;re at cleared height. 525 kilomtrs up, redy for ftl. Cleared?
ADMIN_1: Punch it, chewy ($50 to whoever gets that refrence)
HWEISS: u watch the stupidest movies, frank. activating ftl
ADMIN_2: ABORT
ADMIN_2: FUKING ABORT THE LANCH
ADMIN_2: VEIS DO YOU HERE ME
ADMIN_1: What's going on?
ADMIN_2: ABROT THE FKING LONCH THATS WHATS FUCING GOING ON
ADMIN_2: CSANDRA JUST CRAHED INTO EARTH-7
JFORD: Slow down, damin, we're aborting the launch. what do you mean we crahed? we havent left yet.
ADMIN_2: We just got a teleport in from a ship by erth-7 they said csndra crashed into it. blew up the fking planet
JFORD: bull, we havent left yet
ADMIN_1: yeah but when you use the ftl you go back in time a bit. If you aborted though well be fin
HWEISS: ******************** not working
ADMIN_2: <i>what</i>
HWEISS: says ftl charg is loked in I can't abort
ADMIN_1: Enter ovrrde psswrd
HWEISS: I DONT HAVE IT
ADMIN_2: cssftl3_prophecy
ADMIN_2: thats an L, not a one, btw
HWEISS: not working says stopping launch will criticly dmg enjin
LGARRET: wtf are you idiots doing up on bridge? engin is spazzing out down here
ADMIN_2: ITS A <CENSORED>ING OVERRIDE ITS SUPPOSED TO INGOR SAFTY BREAK
HWEISS: just tell me how to stop
ADMIN_2: THAT IS HOW YOU STOP IT
LGARRET: admin it takes a second ovrride from your pose
LGARRET: *position
ADMIN_1: thers only 1 override password, says its curenly in use
LGARRET: Have ford run aux engine autoterminate i'll clear out engineer decks, this thing will esplode
HWEISS: tWNTY SECONDS
JFORD: its too late to autoterm. Were going to launch, admin
ADMIN_1: the ship is gong to crash if you launch you have to stop it from crashing b4 it hits erth-7
JFORD: we will stop it
ADMIN_1: you cant stop the launch
JFORD: we will stop the carsh
ADMIN_2: god be with you
CONNECTION LOST
Good idea? Bad idea?
CASSANDRA PROJECT PERSONNEL IRC LOG
date:june/3/2588
12:41
JFORD: who's excited? Seriously guys, this will be huge
AMASIH: *Whose
JFORD: Ha ha, <CENSORED> you, Masih.
AMASIH: Get in line, Captain.
ADMIN_1: If you gentlemen are quite done, could we get this underway? We're about to make history, and I'd appreciate it if
ADMIN_1: you didn't embarrass yourselves in front of the whole galaxy. (Oops hit enter too early :P)
AMASIH: No problem, were just waitin for ford to get his <CENSORED> up to the bridge.
AMASIH: Also, please, for <CENSORED>'s sake, turn of the profanity filter. Were not 12 yrs old
JFORD: On my way. Also, its *We're, not were
LGARRET: OH< COME AT ME <CENSORED>ES, I AM SO READY FOR A GRAMMER FIGHT
ADMIN_2: @ford, you on the bridge yet?
JFORD: Yeah, just got on the lift. we clear 4 takeout?
JFORD: *Takeout
JFORD: DAmmit, TAKEOFF.
ADMIN_2: Dinner later, captain ford. For now, jsut get your ship off the ground. Hans can engage ftl as soon as youre out of atmo.
JFORD: Ok, dock loks disgaged, were lifting off. @admin what should our alt be when we go ftl>
ADMIN_1: alt>500 kilm we dont want you frying any stalactites
ADMIN_1: *Satellites. <CENSORED>ing schizo autocorrect.
HWEISS: Altitud at 250 kilomters. well be clear to leave in ~~ 2 mins
ADMIN_2: Funny how accorrect doesnt fix 'altitud” but it thinks satellites==stalactites. leaving frank 2 handle rest of takeoff, I gotta go.
JFORD: Ahhh that sucks, your gunna miss the launch1
ADMIN_1: Yeah, command called him over for somethin. Sucks 2 be alan.
HWEISS: Ok, we;re at cleared height. 525 kilomtrs up, redy for ftl. Cleared?
ADMIN_1: Punch it, chewy ($50 to whoever gets that refrence)
HWEISS: u watch the stupidest movies, frank. activating ftl
ADMIN_2: ABORT
ADMIN_2: FUKING ABORT THE LANCH
ADMIN_2: VEIS DO YOU HERE ME
ADMIN_1: What's going on?
ADMIN_2: ABROT THE FKING LONCH THATS WHATS FUCING GOING ON
ADMIN_2: CSANDRA JUST CRAHED INTO EARTH-7
JFORD: Slow down, damin, we're aborting the launch. what do you mean we crahed? we havent left yet.
ADMIN_2: We just got a teleport in from a ship by erth-7 they said csndra crashed into it. blew up the fking planet
JFORD: bull, we havent left yet
ADMIN_1: yeah but when you use the ftl you go back in time a bit. If you aborted though well be fin
HWEISS: ******************** not working
ADMIN_2: <i>what</i>
HWEISS: says ftl charg is loked in I can't abort
ADMIN_1: Enter ovrrde psswrd
HWEISS: I DONT HAVE IT
ADMIN_2: cssftl3_prophecy
ADMIN_2: thats an L, not a one, btw
HWEISS: not working says stopping launch will criticly dmg enjin
LGARRET: wtf are you idiots doing up on bridge? engin is spazzing out down here
ADMIN_2: ITS A <CENSORED>ING OVERRIDE ITS SUPPOSED TO INGOR SAFTY BREAK
HWEISS: just tell me how to stop
ADMIN_2: THAT IS HOW YOU STOP IT
LGARRET: admin it takes a second ovrride from your pose
LGARRET: *position
ADMIN_1: thers only 1 override password, says its curenly in use
LGARRET: Have ford run aux engine autoterminate i'll clear out engineer decks, this thing will esplode
HWEISS: tWNTY SECONDS
JFORD: its too late to autoterm. Were going to launch, admin
ADMIN_1: the ship is gong to crash if you launch you have to stop it from crashing b4 it hits erth-7
JFORD: we will stop it
ADMIN_1: you cant stop the launch
JFORD: we will stop the carsh
ADMIN_2: god be with you
CONNECTION LOST