Ken122
06-12-2014, 02:31 PM
Hi,
I start to write a book i have two pages now, i have that feeling that is not a good start. It's my first book. Please read it and tell me what you think!
Is one day before graduation ceremony for me on the boot camp Parris island. I‘m about to become what I always wanted to be, a marine.Me and my good friend, Todd Brown, that I meet in the camp, were waiting for our repartization. I was hopping I will be deployed to a unit somewhere in Iraq and get straight in the action, but someone else had other plans for me. Todd, or “The Big Guy” how I use to call him because he had a very muscular body and the strength of an elephant, and me were talking about what were going to do when we finaly get out of the island. He said he want to party, like me. It was 5:00 AM when the drill instructor, a very tall man with a scar right under his right eyes in shape of “W” come to me and said that he want to talk with me about something important. He took me to his office and he pulled the curtains.
- How are you, private? He asked me with his hoarse voice.
- Sir, I’m good, sir! I said loud and clear like any soldier.
- Have you made plans for when you get out of my island?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Oh, well from now on you have no plans because I have something better for
you!
- Sir?
- You’re the best shooter I’ve ever seen in my life, did you know that? He start to walk around the room looking nervous.
- Sir, no, sir! I knowed that I’m a good shooter, but if that comes from my
drill instructor, that is really something.
- Tomorrow after the ceremony I want you to come in this office.
- Sir, yes, sir! I was hopping to stay with my family, but I really wanted so
see what is this all about.
- You’re free to go now. And private, don’t tell anyone that you’re coming
here tomorrow! Do you undersand?
- Sir, yes, sir!
I turned around and leave. I went back to my bed and after some time Todd entered the room. He get straight to bed without even say “hi” to me. I never saw Todd like that before. He was always happy and always had some funny jokes with him, but I had my problems so I ignored that. That night I could’t sleep, I was keep thinking at what the drill instructor mean with “something better”. Finally I manage to fall asleep after a while. The next day we were all getting ready for the ceremony, except for Tedd who God knows where he was, when the drill instructor come to me and said that I will not participate to the ceremony and to come to his office right now. So I do that. I walk along with the drill instructor and at the door was a black man who looks like the secret agents from the movies, with the glasses and everything. The drill instructor opend the door and he said to enter, so I did. There was Todd with 2 mans dressed like the one who was at the door. Todd looked surprised to see me there, like me to see him there. I get in line with him and the white guy start to talk.
- I supposed you too know eachother, right?
- Sir, yes, sir! We answered both at the same time.
- Good! You two have been selected to be part of secret division, in a remote
military base. If you accept you will be not allowed so say anything to no one, you will sign a contract with us and if you do say something you will face martial court. Do I make myself clear?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Good. Now you will have a week free to do whatever you want. After that
we will call you and you an inform you when a car will come and take you to the airport. From there you will get in an airplane, you will shot the legitimation that the driver will give it to you and you will not ask any question. You will not talk with any of the passangers. When you arrive show your legitimation to the control point, the officers will take care of you from there. You will get all the information about what you are about to do when you arrive there, but until then all you need to know is that you are there for security reasons. You will be in training for a week, after that you get home and have a free week. Then next week the same car will come to take you at the airport and you repeat the story. You will remain for 3 weeks at the base and then you get back for a week. Do you understand that?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Good. Now sign the contract! About the money, you will get 50.000 $ a
week and a personal car. That’s a lot of money ,I said myself, for just guarding some scienties, but I didn’t think too much and a sign it. When Todd get the contract to read it I realize that I didn’t, I was hopping I didn’t made a big mistake. He look at the contract very closely and I was looking at him hopping that he will sign so I will know that everything is ok. After a few minutes he looked at me and he finnaly sign. I felt a big release when he do it. After that the two agents left the room. After they close the door I jumped on Todd with questions.
I start to write a book i have two pages now, i have that feeling that is not a good start. It's my first book. Please read it and tell me what you think!
Is one day before graduation ceremony for me on the boot camp Parris island. I‘m about to become what I always wanted to be, a marine.Me and my good friend, Todd Brown, that I meet in the camp, were waiting for our repartization. I was hopping I will be deployed to a unit somewhere in Iraq and get straight in the action, but someone else had other plans for me. Todd, or “The Big Guy” how I use to call him because he had a very muscular body and the strength of an elephant, and me were talking about what were going to do when we finaly get out of the island. He said he want to party, like me. It was 5:00 AM when the drill instructor, a very tall man with a scar right under his right eyes in shape of “W” come to me and said that he want to talk with me about something important. He took me to his office and he pulled the curtains.
- How are you, private? He asked me with his hoarse voice.
- Sir, I’m good, sir! I said loud and clear like any soldier.
- Have you made plans for when you get out of my island?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Oh, well from now on you have no plans because I have something better for
you!
- Sir?
- You’re the best shooter I’ve ever seen in my life, did you know that? He start to walk around the room looking nervous.
- Sir, no, sir! I knowed that I’m a good shooter, but if that comes from my
drill instructor, that is really something.
- Tomorrow after the ceremony I want you to come in this office.
- Sir, yes, sir! I was hopping to stay with my family, but I really wanted so
see what is this all about.
- You’re free to go now. And private, don’t tell anyone that you’re coming
here tomorrow! Do you undersand?
- Sir, yes, sir!
I turned around and leave. I went back to my bed and after some time Todd entered the room. He get straight to bed without even say “hi” to me. I never saw Todd like that before. He was always happy and always had some funny jokes with him, but I had my problems so I ignored that. That night I could’t sleep, I was keep thinking at what the drill instructor mean with “something better”. Finally I manage to fall asleep after a while. The next day we were all getting ready for the ceremony, except for Tedd who God knows where he was, when the drill instructor come to me and said that I will not participate to the ceremony and to come to his office right now. So I do that. I walk along with the drill instructor and at the door was a black man who looks like the secret agents from the movies, with the glasses and everything. The drill instructor opend the door and he said to enter, so I did. There was Todd with 2 mans dressed like the one who was at the door. Todd looked surprised to see me there, like me to see him there. I get in line with him and the white guy start to talk.
- I supposed you too know eachother, right?
- Sir, yes, sir! We answered both at the same time.
- Good! You two have been selected to be part of secret division, in a remote
military base. If you accept you will be not allowed so say anything to no one, you will sign a contract with us and if you do say something you will face martial court. Do I make myself clear?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Good. Now you will have a week free to do whatever you want. After that
we will call you and you an inform you when a car will come and take you to the airport. From there you will get in an airplane, you will shot the legitimation that the driver will give it to you and you will not ask any question. You will not talk with any of the passangers. When you arrive show your legitimation to the control point, the officers will take care of you from there. You will get all the information about what you are about to do when you arrive there, but until then all you need to know is that you are there for security reasons. You will be in training for a week, after that you get home and have a free week. Then next week the same car will come to take you at the airport and you repeat the story. You will remain for 3 weeks at the base and then you get back for a week. Do you understand that?
- Sir, yes, sir!
- Good. Now sign the contract! About the money, you will get 50.000 $ a
week and a personal car. That’s a lot of money ,I said myself, for just guarding some scienties, but I didn’t think too much and a sign it. When Todd get the contract to read it I realize that I didn’t, I was hopping I didn’t made a big mistake. He look at the contract very closely and I was looking at him hopping that he will sign so I will know that everything is ok. After a few minutes he looked at me and he finnaly sign. I felt a big release when he do it. After that the two agents left the room. After they close the door I jumped on Todd with questions.