Scottish Crime Drama...untitled

[Sef]

:iagree:

[AuntShecky]

Sorry, I can't read much of this. The text is too tightly packed. Next time please skip a space between paragraphs, including starting a new paragraph with each change of speaker.

It would be a good idea to brush up on your grammar. Here are a few errors from the first couple of sentences:
"could of" -- could have
"combined average" -- omit the "combined"
" of nine or there abouts" -- of nine or so.

Work on your spelling. Don't rely exclusively on Spell-Check.® For example: "unintelligent" "species"

Refresh your punctuation skills. Try this:
http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?56601-Auntie-s-Down-and-Dirty-Punctuation-Guide

Before posting, always read over your work over, preferably aloud to catch obvious errors. Proofread and proofread again.

[free]

Cruelity is not welcomed from whatever the side.

[AuntShecky]

Cruelity is not welcomed from whatever the side.

What? Huh? Please explain.

[free]

What? Huh? Please explain.

The crime, I mean. It is cruel, isn't it?