Notes on the Weather

[Lykren]

*submitted

[Mohammad Ahmad]

I was cold once. Then
I wasn’t. The morning I die
I like this

[Lykren]

Thanks!

[AuntShecky]

This one has some ambiguous tension. The speaker either is facing the concept of death head-on realistically or he is pretending that it doesn't or won't bother him, that it's neutral.

I'd tighten some of the language a bit, but otherwise this is remarkable.

Nice job.

Auntie

[Lykren]

Thanks AuntShecky!

[qimissung]

Ambiguous tension. I think that about sums it up. That andtheword remarkable. I hate you, Lykren, you're so good.

[Lykren]

Strong words, Qimi! Thanks!

[qimissung]

It's opposite day for the first part :)

[DieterM]

Sometimes, in this section, I stumble upon a poem I like. And then, very rarely, I read one I would love to have written myself. This here is one of those. Very well done, Lykren!

[Lykren]

Thanks very much, DieterM.